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"Apnœa" - ??? 2007

The sting of open flesh
this hole I can feel at the soles of my feet
(and the palms of my hands)
Out from inside the skin flows wine
dripping to the valley below my feet...
gentle, the breeze, that closes my eyes

In front of the tide
- I'm here next to you, you're in my reach.
I'm physically next to you
the sea...

the silence speaks sentences, louder than touch
your pages so fragile - like night into day
a quick caress, filling the air like when
I run my hands through your hair and hurt you...
You don't waste time to react.

Dig it deeper
your fingers in my hands, kissing my soul
it tastes like drowning
my hands will begin to shed blood.

The evening sunlight,
bright through the dust clouds at the edge of the canyon,
blinds me...
The sting returns
but there is no breeze, and I feel ill.
©2007-2008 `12memories
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der Atemstillstand.

A poem written a long time ago, months ago.

I must've skipped it and didn't upload it.
Always moves me, it's really quite a depressing poem.


Apnœa @ wiki
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~thewaterbook:iconthewaterbook: Sep 22, 2007, 2:31:05 PM
Very beautiful. Not depressing at all...Seems more aggressive and desperate to me. I love it; an instant favourite. :heart:

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~:blackrose: Mutilate the people, but please, do not mutilate the arts. :blackrose:~
`12memories:icon12memories: Sep 22, 2007, 2:35:21 PM
why thank you.

what depresses me is the line
"I run my fingers through your hair
and hurt you"

The reader is really supposed to slow down when that's said.

thanks.

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Terrify me
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you can't silence the memories...
~thewaterbook:iconthewaterbook: Sep 22, 2007, 3:05:33 PM
Yes, that line definitely gives you that love-sickness feeling. I wonder what it really means.."and hurt you". It did actually slow me down. I kept wondering "how?".

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~:blackrose: Mutilate the people, but please, do not mutilate the arts. :blackrose:~
`12memories:icon12memories: Sep 22, 2007, 3:14:20 PM
oh wow, it worked.

I'm so pleased. :)

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Terrify me
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you can't silence the memories...
~lousypirate:iconlousypirate: Sep 22, 2007, 3:19:49 PM
:thumbsup:

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Chicken is as shit does.
`12memories:icon12memories: Sep 22, 2007, 3:23:13 PM
:P

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Terrify me
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you can't silence the memories...
~thewaterbook:iconthewaterbook: Sep 22, 2007, 3:24:06 PM
:thumbsup::lol:

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~:blackrose: Mutilate the people, but please, do not mutilate the arts. :blackrose:~
~ellenjanuary:iconellenjanuary: Sep 22, 2007, 3:39:04 PM
Yeah, the when makes it work by disrupting the tempo and bringing anticipation...
I'm thinkin'
:thumbsup:

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unknowing stuff daily...
`12memories:icon12memories: Sep 22, 2007, 4:08:19 PM
huge thanks.

greatly appreciated.

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Terrify me
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you can't silence the memories...
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